Here are two pieces of quality writing. The first is from Aimee Edmonds
My Favourite Place
My favourite place is my Grandma's place.
In my Grandma's flowery room there is a television, a cute dinosuar picture and an old wedding photo.
When I am in her bedroom I like to look at her photo album and the pictures of when she was a child.
She let's me use her old clothes and shoes for dress-ups.
Grandma bakes yummy apricot cake and I love it.
She lives on Levin with Grandpa and a fluffy cat.
It takes a long time in the car to get to Levin but it is fun when I get there.
Part of the success criteria for this story was to use adjectives to describe the favourite place and you can see Aimee has done this.
The next piece of writing is by Zion Bidois, also about his favourite place.
My Favourite Place
My favourite place is the beach. I like to go there in the hot weather.
When I get to the beach I swim in the cold water or I lie on my back on the warm sand.
The beach is fun and I make sand castles.
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